Pozdravljen, shadyyy, nekaj prevodnih mest za razmislek.) Lp, Jupiter!

TO SEE FURTHER

The summer screams

from under your fingers.

Nobody's sound

can drown it out. (v redu:)

You lift your ring finger

high towards the sky

setting limits

to THE grey ? borders (kakšne obrobe?) of dailiness. ? your  (razmisli:)

You let me eat

from ?a/the pot

that grew/has been growing  on your back

for a long time.

You let me read (kateri pomen?)

a rosemary and the poems, (zakaj A rosemary, THE poems?)

breathing on a the sunny side

of your tibia. shinbone.

I ?shiver shake/quiver like

a bare spear in midst of sand. grass out in the sands.

I drink water from the eyes

that can see further

when I close them.

And you know,  And guess what  (kako je mišljen »In veš« ...)

I shall will come to you. (shall – privzdignjeno)

Only when

you will close them too. /

When you have closed them too.

Zdravo, hvala za popravke, na nekaterih mestih še razmišljam glede prevoda :)

lp