Strange and colorful on the vapors
I swallow mammoth hands beyond the tomb
Crazy! The day felt good
Very humming in the spirits
You grasp arid feet about the tomb
Be transparent. The life is no more
Sinful and blue below the sea
You feel big dreams among the mist
Damn! The sin will come
clouded thirsty
at a crossroads
an empty address book
How many times
our neighbour
looks for landmarks
in a different light
Poslano:
05. 08. 2013 ob 14:32
Spremenjeno:
05. 08. 2013 ob 14:34
Among the mist – sicer vidim, da je to ime neke glasbene skupine:), ampak zaradi neštevne rabe samostalnika »mist« predlog "among" zveni narobe.
Zdi se, da želiš uporabljati ameriško angleščino, zato predlagam rabo »neighbor« namesto britanskega zapisa.
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