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Don't hurt the child
Don't hurt the child avtor Tilen Hrovatič
Tilen, ko bi vsi razmišljali tako!
:)
popravi tele škratke:
You can kill me gently, you can kill me rough.
You can torture me with machines, I wont say "Enough!"
You can beat me up, painfully and wild,
But please, don't hurt the child!
You can starve me till I'm deathDEAD
If you want I'll be your little pet.
If you want I'll be mild,
But please, don't hurt the child!
I'm almost at the end,
I've seen the world.
So if you wanjtWANT somebody, take ME you thief!
But don't hurt the child, let him live!
If you want to trade, go to the mall,
If you want to rape, buy a doll.
If you want to dig gold and if you want to rule,
Don't hurt the child, he's not your tool!
If you want to drop bombs, drop them on me,
if you want to take a life, take mine for free.
If you want to be a master, I'll be your slave,
Just don't hurt the child, please keep him save!SAFE
If you want to have war, I'll play with you,
If you want to rule the world, I'll follow you!
If you want to be a violent father, I'll be your son,
Just don't hurt the child, let him dream on!
:))
lidija
Tilen, ko bi vsi razmišljali tako!
:)
popravi tele škratke:
You can kill me gently, you can kill me rough.
You can torture me with machines, I wont say "Enough!"
You can beat me up, painfully and wild,
But please, don't hurt the child!
You can starve me till I'm deathDEAD
If you want I'll be your little pet.
If you want I'll be mild,
But please, don't hurt the child!
I'm almost at the end,
I've seen the world.
So if you wanjtWANT somebody, take ME you thief!
But don't hurt the child, let him live!
If you want to trade, go to the mall,
If you want to rape, buy a doll.
If you want to dig gold and if you want to rule,
Don't hurt the child, he's not your tool!
If you want to drop bombs, drop them on me,
if you want to take a life, take mine for free.
If you want to be a master, I'll be your slave,
Just don't hurt the child, please keep him save!SAFE
If you want to have war, I'll play with you,
If you want to rule the world, I'll follow you!
If you want to be a violent father, I'll be your son,
Just don't hurt the child, let him dream on!
:))
lidija
Pesem zagotovo seže v srce, nas opomni na človeško pritlehnost in po drugi strani plemenitost, vzbudi željo, da bi imeli vsi otroci sveta takšnega angela varuha, ki bi jih varoval pred zlom.
Zmoti le par reči (poleg že navedenega):
- you can torture me with machines >> zakaj machines, nekako mi ne sedejo v kontekst - če želiš ohraniti ritem, lahko: you can put a torture on me, I won't say "Enough!"
- You can beat me up, painfully and wild, >> wildly, biti mora prislov; s tem se ti seveda podre rima, zato je treba to preoblikovati, npr.:
you can beat me up, be mad or wild
- Dvakrat se pojavi 'rule': if you want to rule IN if you want to rule the world. To je tako podobna fraza, da njena ponovitev res zmoti. Morda bi v drugem primeru dal: If you want to conquer the world.
- Problem je tudi v obračanju na otroka kot na 'him'. Child je lahko he ali she. Z 'it' pa se tudi ne zdi primerno, čeprav gugl da 73.000 zadetkov za 'child itself'. Kočljivo.
Lep pozdrav!
Kerstin
Zmoti le par reči (poleg že navedenega):
- you can torture me with machines >> zakaj machines, nekako mi ne sedejo v kontekst - če želiš ohraniti ritem, lahko: you can put a torture on me, I won't say "Enough!"
- You can beat me up, painfully and wild, >> wildly, biti mora prislov; s tem se ti seveda podre rima, zato je treba to preoblikovati, npr.:
you can beat me up, be mad or wild
- Dvakrat se pojavi 'rule': if you want to rule IN if you want to rule the world. To je tako podobna fraza, da njena ponovitev res zmoti. Morda bi v drugem primeru dal: If you want to conquer the world.
- Problem je tudi v obračanju na otroka kot na 'him'. Child je lahko he ali she. Z 'it' pa se tudi ne zdi primerno, čeprav gugl da 73.000 zadetkov za 'child itself'. Kočljivo.
Lep pozdrav!
Kerstin
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