http://www.pesem.si/article.php?blog_id=7022

Lep pozdrav,
ne zameri, malo sem ti slovnično uredila pesmico, da se sploh da brat. Saj veš, osnovni if stavki, pa te stvari ... Na vsak način popravi. Znaš? greš na - moje pesmi in potem - uredi.

Drugače ima pesem zanimivi idejo za nastanek nečesa dobrega, samo motijo klišejske primerjave (metulji, zvezde). Uporabi raje kakšne svoje, nove, originalnejše simbole.


And if...
And if you looked
over the river to the other side,
you would see a butterfly
and your eyes would shine like stars;

And if you looked
to the other side of the moon,
you would see the sun
and your mouth would curl in a smile;

That smile would lighten up the whole world,
but not my heart.

:) Kočijaž