Where did it start and when you came?
I didn't even know your name.
They said it's love,
but what is that?
I didn't know nothing about.
I tried to laugh,
I tried to cry, but I didn't even know why.
Sometimes I'm happy, sometimes I am sad.
But in the moment I am completely mad.
Mad about you, but why am I?
Do I even know or wonder why?
The moment's here,
completely true,
out of the sky, out of the blue.
You are here,
and here are you.
There I am and we are two.
The perfect puzzle, baby we are true.
Lepa pesem. Samo par drobnarij s slovnico.
Ko uporabis vprasalnico 'did', sledi glagol v prvi obliki. Torej v prvem verzu ne sme biti 'when did you came' -- lahko je samo 'when you came', glede na to da potem rimas v naslednji kitici :).
'I tried to cry, didnt even knew why' -- ista stvar. Did + prva oblika, torej 'know'. Lahko gres fino anglescino in se poigras z npr. 'never even knew why'.
Zatipkala si se pri 'completly'. -ly cleni se vedno samo dodajajo pri koncih besed, razen pri redkih izjemah. Se pravi -- completely.
Sicer pa custvena pesem, s preprostim (samo)vprasanjem, ki pritegne tudi bralca.
Ostani lepo zacarana :).
Hvala za lepe opombe, sem vse uredila in popravila.
Dejansko ugotavljam, da je boljše da se držim slovenščine. ampak poskusila pa sem :)
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