*worst*
I can barely breathe,
I choke myself to sleep.
Run away from me,
can't you see?
Clearly.
That I am my own worst enemy,
where am I?
I lost myself.
In my own reality.
Where there are no phone connections,
I can see my own reactions,
how they're supposed to be.
I lock myself and eat the key.
I'm so annoying, my dear.
I am and I will be my own worst fear.
Odlično (kljub naslovu :) z dobrim ritmom! Predlagam pa nekaj popravkov:
Verjetno: breathe namesto breath.
Clearly - z veliko začetnico.
Težko ocenim ali: I lost me. ali je boljše: I lost myself.
Where there are … – namesto: Where there is …
Morda pika na koncu: … supposed to be.
Milan Ž. - Jošt Š.
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