
I never learned that I am past,
the time for you that cannot last,
I am loving “flash” of recent days,
that is so wrong in many ways.
I know I was a shame to you,
I was so young and skinny too,
but at the time you did not know,
that I have truly loved you so.
The age has changed the way I look,
it made my soul a sad old book,
but love I felt for your was there,
I kept it safe and I took care.
Through telephone you said enough,
that stuff with me was just a bluff,
that you were sorry meeting me,
that all you want is to be free.
Your words were cruel but now I know,
you did not want to hurt me so,
you could not say it in my face,
I’ll walk away and leave no trace.
I cried but I still kept my pride,
I begged you but I never lied,
but now the tears will dry away,
you never heard the words I say.
Silence is what hurts me most,
there is no life and I am ghost,
this haven crushed just in one day,
I always wanted you to stay.
I look at you how you are strong,
inside you know, that you are wrong
but still you left and walked away,
you couldn’t said those words that day.
Sorry, love you, help me now,
your ego just won’t you allow,
it’s hard to say this words to me,
you needn’t fall down on you knee.
Goodbye, so long, my only love,
I leave you with stars above,
but know no matter what you do,
I will be always loving you!
Ganljivo in tako lepo napisano v tujem jeziku!
fajn teče, pesmica s preprostim taktom in rimami, za katere kar vnaprej vemo, da si bodo sledikle ;)
ja, ampak pazi se napak v angleški skladnji, predvsem tistih, ki se največkrat zgodijo zaradi dobresednega prevajanja fraz iz enega jezika v drugi (tudi obratno)-
npr
through telephone . over the (tele)phone
pa naprimer tole obračanje besed tudi rima ne opravičuje ;)
-your ego just won’t you allow, = won't allow you!
pa napačna glagolska raba, časi v odvisnikih
npr
you couldn't said - you could not SAY
ampak na splošno je tale pesem najboljša od tvojih do sedaj objavljenih angleških rimank. En nasvet - poskusi iskati zahtevnejše rime na dajše besede in tudi metriko malo razširi, pa bo.
lp, Lidija
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