wolf

Twilight

the full Moon is just rising

and so are we

 

i slip silently through the forest

  silver Light is slowly  waking up Shadows 

so they can dance elegantly whit a clumsy tree.

 

on the clif

i brake the peaceful Silence of night 

whit a loud passionate howl

love and hate, anger and faith,

all in 

all out 

not a usual sound, no this tme its differente

ts a call.

of thirst

for Blood.

Enough off human stinky smell  taking Our teritory.

We must Fight back or we will all be shoot down and get stuffed like little 
squirrels.

 the hills howls back.

aaa-uuuuuuuuuu aaa uuuuuuuu

aaa-uuuuuuuuuu aaa uuuuuuuu

 

 

Yoda

Andrejka

Poslano:
29. 08. 2015 ob 14:16

This wolf of yours speaks in a good provocative manner but it 'howls out' a lot of transcriptive and other mistakes. Sorry.

Bye,

A

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urednica

Poslano:
29. 08. 2015 ob 22:19

No, nič hudega, napake se da pa ja popravit. Gremo najprej na čisto osnovne:

Twilight.

The full Moon is just rising

and so are we.

 

I slip silently through the forest,

silver Light is slowly  waking up Shadows 

so they can dance elegantly with clumsy tree.   (clumsy? a si prepričan?)

on the clif

I brake the peaceful Silence of the nigh

with a loud passionate howl

love and hate, anger and faith,

all in 

all out 

not an usual sound, no, this time it's different

it's a call

of thirst

for Blood.

Enough of that human stink taking Our teritory!

We must Fight back or we will all be shot down and get stuffed like little 
squirrels.

 The hills howl back.

aaa-uuuuuuuuuu aaa uuuuuuuu

aaa-uuuuuuuuuu aaa uuuuuuuu

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Yoda

Poslano:
01. 09. 2015 ob 18:34

Sploh ne znam popravit napak  Blokada. Še to kar je nastalo je glede na moje poznavanje angleščine več kot odlično. :) 

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